Practice Write 9/14

I feel that my draft is okay because I have some personal experiences written on it with some analysis, but I lack evidence from the reading. I was focusing more on myself and forgetting to connect it with the readings and I feel like I need to edit my draft, as majority of my paper is focusing on my view of love and giving the reader every inch of detail about how it all went down, so they can feel like they are actually witnessing it. I believe that with the help of my peers and attending the office hours, I'll be able to get a better idea on how to narrow my paper down and include more evidence from the reading.